I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 8 and in 2021 I will be a year 9. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hello my name is Jesse today we had to do some writing on what your shoes would be doing when you leave the house or go somewhere.
When you leave somewhere your shoes go and do something else. My shoes would go and play a game or something and they eat lots of food like chips. Then they would go spend some money on candy and more food, they would also get some fizzy with there food.They would waist all of my money and then I would be poor they would go swimming at jelly park and jump of the diving board and get wet.
After that they will go on a summer vacation and they will get there by using a boat that costs a lot of money and then they will come back home and turn on the fire and then get dry and then play some more games.
It sounds like your shoes are very busy when you are away. I like the way that you took on feedback and added in some punctuation to your writing. I also like how you included images and videos to make your post more interesting. Keep up the awesome blogging.
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Hi Jesse!
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like your shoes are very busy when you are away. I like the way that you took on feedback and added in some punctuation to your writing. I also like how you included images and videos to make your post more interesting. Keep up the awesome blogging.
- Miss Birtch