Explanation Writing Assessment

Hello readers for the last couple of days we have been working on a writing assessment i was working with Ashton we were doing our writing about Polynesian and navigation in space we had to do a draft and then our final copy's. Then we had to read others story's to see if it made sense and then we had to do the sentence structure and the structure and language I wanted to work on how many times I used and. This is what i made please leave a comment on my blog on what I could do better next time.





Do you want to know more about navigation? Back in the day the Polynesian people would use the sun,birds and the ocean to help them find the way to the destination. They would use the sun, stars, ocean and birds they would help them get to land or get to their location if they were lost and they needed help.





The vehicles they used were rovers they used the rover to go to Mars to get samples and take photos. They are taking photos because people want to go to Mars so they can see what it is like and so they can come back to Earth and they can tell people how their experience was on Mars.





The Polynesians use materials like the sun, stars, birds and the flow of the ocean. It would tell them how close they were to land and what way they needed to go. The stars would tell them where to go the birds would tell you how close you were from land and the swell of the ocean would do the same as the birds.The birds and the swell would take them to their destination and they would use everything else to take them to their destination. They might get lost and they wouldn't know what way to go or where to go. They will use other resources to get them to their destination.








The people that are going to Mars would have to have a parachute for the rover to land safely but they are actually using a ladder. It is going to drop the rover down slowly so it doesn't break because they wouldn't be able to get samples if it broke and then if people want to go to Mars they won’t be able to go up to Mars.






In the rocket ship you need human power to make your rocket ship or boat move. Today, instead of using the sun and everything else you can use a phone or google maps to find your location and if you don’t have a phone you can do what the Polynesians used to do instead of using their phones.